Sep 3, 2011

Friday Flash Fiction 2nd September

Week by week, and Friday by Friday, G-Man invites us to discuss life's little ironies in a strictly rationed 55 words.


Crash Team

"We're losing him. 400 joules! Clear!"
"No, he's breathing!  I'm getting a pulse."
The patient eyes opened. "What? Where?"
"Easy, son! What's that your holding? Ticket with a number?"
"There was this huge queue at the Pearly Gates. Guy in a white frock gave me this. Told me to come back later."
The crash team looked at each other.

(55 words, not including title)
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14 comments:

  1. Monkey ManSeptember 2, 2011 at 11:56 PM

    Free pass. Wish we all could get one.

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  2. G-ManSeptember 3, 2011 at 12:44 AM

    Doc....
    I Loved This!!!
    Clever and Perfect
    Excellent 55 My Friend
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  3. izzySeptember 3, 2011 at 1:46 AM

    Cool beans! love it thanks-

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  4. Katherine KrigeSeptember 3, 2011 at 4:35 AM

    Take a number. Wouldn't that be nice. Great story painted in only 55 little words.

    So what was his number?

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  5. JinksySeptember 3, 2011 at 7:37 AM

    Must be where the phrase "Your number's up!" originated... 55 is obviously a lucky one. ☼

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  6. LydiaSeptember 3, 2011 at 8:05 AM

    You darn bet that the crash team would look at each other! This would make a great little skit, and it made a great 55.

    Re: your request for info following my 55, if you are seeking the male swimming suit I think you can duplicate at the underwear section of most stores. However, the woman's attire is a bit trickier. I searched and best I could find was an actual blog dedicated to none other than beach pajamas! La Mode Pyjama There now, isn't that special?

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  7. Doctor FTSESeptember 3, 2011 at 8:19 AM

    Jinksy . . . good thought. Your'e probably right!

    Lydia . . this should encourage folk to go visit your 55. I guess beach pyjamas date from the times before ladies had legs?

    Other folks . . thanks for visiting and for your generous comments.

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  8. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallSeptember 3, 2011 at 4:48 PM

    incredible piece.

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  9. Rek SeshSeptember 3, 2011 at 7:46 PM

    Awesome piece ...sure with the sky rocketing population On Earth alone...new heavens need to open up pretty soon....the ending was unexpected.

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  10. Jannie FunsterSeptember 3, 2011 at 7:50 PM

    That is the coolest near-death-experience writing ever!

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  11. OliviaSeptember 4, 2011 at 8:47 AM

    oh my my!!
    This was some paranormal experience.. very well told.. hugs xo

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  12. MargaretSeptember 5, 2011 at 3:33 AM

    Ha! Good to know you will be welcome back. It would be terrible to not have any ticket at all. :)

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  13. CadSeptember 6, 2011 at 10:36 AM

    Knowing my luck, I shall get there on the day the ticket machine runs out of paper...

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  14. J Cosmo NewberySeptember 6, 2011 at 12:04 PM

    Love it. At least the guy in the frock didn't send him to the place down the road.

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